Essay planning On the Sidewalk Bleeding by Evan

Essay planning On the Sidewalk Bleeding by Evan

Essay planning On the Sidewalk Bleeding by Evan Hunter Choosing an essay question Score out / put a cross beside any that are not suitable. Tick / circle any that are. Decide which question best fits the text and your quotations.

E S O PR Essay questions If it says or, pick ONE 1. Choose a novel or short story in which you feel

sympathy or admiration or pity for the main character. Explain how the writer achieves the effect and discuss how it contributes to your appreciation of the text as a whole. 2. Choose a novel which is set during a period of social or political change. Discuss how important the writers evocation of the period is to your appreciation of the text as a whole. Quote:

Quote: Topic 1: Topic 2: Essay question: Text: Topic 3:

Quote: Topic 4: Quote: Quote: Quote:

Topic 1: Topic 2: Essay question: Choose a short story in which you feel sympathy for the main character. Text: On the Sidewalk Bleeding Topic 3: Quote:

Topic 4: Quote: Quote: Quote: Topic 1:

Topic 2: Andy has been stabbed Nobody helps him Essay question: Choose a short story in which you feel sympathy for the main character. Text: On the Sidewalk Bleeding

Quote: Topic 3: Topic 4: He does not have a future He want to be remembered as Andy

Quote: Quote: The knife entered just below his rib cage and had been drawn across his body violently, tearing a wide gap in his flesh. Quote: I don't know. I don't know. I don't want to get mixed up in this. He's a Royal.

Topic 1: Topic 2: Andy has been stabbed Nobody helps him Essay question: Choose a short story in which you feel sympathy for the main character.

Text: On the Sidewalk Bleeding Topic 3: Topic 4: The weather is against him He does not have a future

Quote: He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body Quote: Someday he would marry Laura. Someday he would marry her, and they would have a lot of kids, and then they would get out of the neighbourhood. Quote:

Quote: Topic 1: Topic 2: Essay question: Choose a short story in which you feel admiration for the main character. Text: On the Sidewalk Bleeding Topic 3:

Quote: Topic 4: Quote: Quote 1: Quote 1:

Quote 2: Quote 2: Topic 1: Topic 2: Event 1 Start Event 2 - An event from near the start/middle

Essay question: ? Text: On the Sidewalk Bleeding Topic 3: Topic 4: Event 3 - An event from

the middle/nr the end Event 4 - The end Quote 1: Quote 1: Quote 2: Quote 2:

Key incidents Start Andy has just been stabbed by a member of a rival gang at the start of the story Drunk doesnt help Andy the drunk man thinks Andy is drunk and doesnt call the cops Couple dont help Andy are too scared to help Andy / remind him of Laura

Takes off jacket Andy realises he was stabbed just because he was wearing the jacket and struggles to take it off Dies Andy dies and Laura finds him End the policeman records his death as a gang incident Key terms

Character Setting Plot Theme Conflict Symbol

Key incident Climax Can you identify the techniques? Repetition Word choice He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body

Symbolism Metaphor Word choice March is the start of Spring. The associations of this are of lambs and plants being born/growing. This contrasts with Andy dying too young.

Word choice this is an American word for pavement. This reminds us that the setting is America. We also know it takes place in March. Repetition the word drilling is repeated, emphasising the

force of the rain. He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body Symbolism the jacket represents the gang he is a member of. At this point he still wearing it but, later, he takes it off as he wants to be a remembered as a person,

not just a gang member. Metaphor the rain is being compared to a drill. Just as a drill easily cuts holes in wood, so too it feels like the rain in making holes in Andys flesh. This is violent image that suggests the rain is so hard it is hurting Andy. On the Sidewalk Bleeding

Writing a critical essay Essay task Choose a novel or short story in which you feel sympathy or admiration or pity for the main character. Explain how the writer achieves the effect and discuss how it contributes to your appreciation of the text as a whole.

Essay task Choose a novel or short story in which you feel sympathy or admiration or pity for the main character. Explain how the writer achieves the effect and discuss how it contributes to your appreciation of the text as a whole. Structure

1 2 3 Introduction Main body Conclusion Lets start by looking at the main body. Well come back to the introduction later.

Main body Structure your essays like this: Introduction MAIN BODY Paragraph 1 - Topic 1 Paragraph 2 Topic 2 Paragraph 3 Topic 3 Paragraph 4 Topic 4 Conclusion

Structure your essays like this: Introduction MAIN BODY Paragraph 1 - Event 1 Paragraph 2 Event 2 Paragraph 3 Event 3 Paragraph 4 Event 4 Conclusion

Writing a paragraph Paragraphs should always follow this formula: P E A R P E

A R P = point E = evidence A = analyse R = response / link back to essay question Point = Topic sentence +

Introduce quotation P E A R Topic sentence This is the sentence that starts every new paragraph. In it you summarise what the paragraph is

going to be about. It should have two pieces of information: 1. What the task is 2. What the topic of that paragraph is Topic sentences T + T

Topic sentence Topic = The weather is against Andy Task = Choose a short story in which you feel sympathy for the main character. One way... One event that T+T One way in which sympathy for the character of Andy is created is when the author suggests

the weather is hurting Andy. Topic Task Introduce the quote He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body Location in the story? What character(s) are involved? What has just happened at this point?

Quote Introduce the quote Near the start of the story imagery is used to describe the unpleasant weather: He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body Point should look like this: P (TS) One way in which sympathy for the

character of Andy is created is when the author suggests the weather is hurting Andy. (IQ) Near the start of the story imagery is used to describe the unpleasant weather: A colon is used to Introduce the quotatio Evidence

Evidence = This is the quotation you are going to use. Leave a line before and after the quotation and remember to use quotations marks. P E A R One way in which sympathy for the character of

Andy is created is when the author suggests the weather is hurting Andy. Near the start of the story imagery is used to describe the unpleasant weather: He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body (Start your analysis here.) Analysis This is where you look at the quotation more closely.

Analyse - to examine in detail in order to discover meaning, essential features, etc. Analysis = Analysis mention any techniques Evaluation explain why they are effective

P E A R Analysis + evaluation The word drilling is repeated which emphasises how strong the rain was. This is also a metaphor as the rain is being compared to a drill. Just as a drill easily cuts holes in wood, so too it feels like the rain is, effortlessly,

making holes in Andys flesh. This is a violent image that suggests the rain is so hard it is hurting Andy. In addition, the word March is word choice. The connotations of this word are of the start of spring and baby animals being born. This contrasts with what is happening in the story and highlights the fact that Andy is dying too young. Response = P

E A R Your evaluation will lead you back to the essay question Clearly explain how the quotation you have analysed relates to the essay question Relate this to the short storys theme(s) If you havent already, address the second part of the question

Explain how the writer achieves the effect and discuss how it contributes to your appreciation of the text as a whole. Response Through his effective use of techniques, Hunter uses the weather to create sympathy for Andy. Not only is he in a large amount of pain because of the stabbing, but the rain is adding to his misery. This contributes to my appreciation of the text as a whole because, if the author did not create sympathy for Andy, then

we would not care about his death. It is important that the reader cares about Andy so we can understand the storys theme, that gang violence is futile. Put it all together and it looks like this: One way in which sympathy for the character of Andy is created is when the author suggests the weather is hurting Andy. Near the start of the story imagery is used to describe the unpleasant weather:

P He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body E The word drilling is repeated which emphasises how strong the rain was. This is also a metaphor as the rain is being compared to a drill. Just as a drill easily cuts holes in wood, so too it feels like the rain is making holes in Andys flesh. This is a violent image that suggests the rain is so hard it is hurting Andy. In addition, the

word March is word choice. The connotations of this word are of the start of spring and baby animals being born. This contrasts with what is happening in the story and highlights the fact that Andy is dying too young. Through her effective use of techniques, Duffy creates a vivid and disturbing picture of the concentration camps from the vast numbers of dead bodies that lie in piles, without an attempt at treating them with dignity, to the mindless cruelty of the Nazi soldiers. It is these techniques that skilfully drive home the poems themes and make this a poem that sets out to do more than just entertain. Duffy urges us to remember horrifying events of the past and, more importantly, to learn from these mistakes. A

R One way in which sympathy for the character of Andy is created is when the author suggests the weather is hurting Andy. Near the start of the story imagery is used to describe the unpleasant weather: He lay on the sidewalk with the March rain drilling his jacket and drilling his body The word drilling is repeated which emphasises how strong the rain was. This is also a metaphor as the rain is being compared to a drill. Just as a drill easily cuts holes in wood, so too it feels like the rain is making holes in Andys flesh. This is a

violent image that suggests the rain is so hard it is hurting Andy. In addition, the word March is word choice. The connotations of this word are of the start of spring and baby animals being born. This contrasts with what is happening in the story and highlights the fact that Andy is dying too young. Through her effective use of techniques, Duffy creates a vivid and disturbing picture of the concentration camps from the vast numbers of dead bodies that lie in piles, without an attempt at treating them with dignity, to the mindless cruelty of the Nazi soldiers. It is these techniques that skilfully drive home the poems themes and make this a poem that sets out to do more than just entertain. Duffy urges us to remember horrifying events of the past and, more importantly, to learn from these mistakes.

Introduction Introduction The introduction should not be too long. It should focus on the task right from the start. Identify the text and author Use words from the essay task to explain what the essay will be about.

Use this formula to help you: T A T S

TATS T title A - author T task (this is in the essay question) S summary (a short summary of the plot)

Complete the list below for your essay: T A T (title) (author) (task) Essay title = Choose a short story in which you feel sympathy for the main character.

Change the task into a statement which includes the authors name and the title. Write a short summary of what happens in the short story. Exercise Look at the examples of introductions and highlight the following things (if they are there):

T title A - author T task (this is in the essay question) S summary (a short summary of the plot) On the Sidewalk Bleeding is a really boring story about a boy called Andy who stabs a drunk man.

The short story was written by Evan Hunter and not much really happens in it apart from Andy kicks the bucket and his girlfriend starts bawling greeting. Then it ends. TATS? Strengths? Weaknesses? On the Sidewalk Bleeding is a poem which takes place in a part of New York where rival gangs are at war. Sympathy is created for the main

character, Andy. In many ways. In this essay I will discuss how the author creates sympathy. And look at the techniques. He uses. TATS? Strengths? Weaknesses? On the Sidewalk Bleeding by Evan Hunter is a short story in which you feel sympathy for the main character. The main character is Andy and he is stabbed in an alley at the start of the story because he

is in gang. Different characters enter the alley but nobody helps him. With the last of his strength he takes off his jacket as it is a symbol of the gang he joined. At the end, his girlfriend finds him and a cop records his death. TATS? Strengths? Weaknesses? Your turn

Remember to include: T = On the Sidewalk Bleeding A = Evan Hunter T = Choose a short story in which you feel sympathy for the main character. S = Short plot summary Peer assess introductions Swap and peer assess the introductions you have written. Copy this table and tick the boxes if you can identify them in the introduction.

T - title A - author T - task S - summary Write a comment underneath which says: One thing they did well One thing they should work on to improve next time Conclusion

Conclusion The conclusion is a summing up of the essay. The conclusion is a brief summary of all the points raised in the main body of the essay use the essay question and your topic sentences. Remember, you should never add anything new in the conclusion. The conclusion should sum up what you have written and prove that you have answered the question.

Quotes relating to new points should not be used in the conclusion. Restate your personal opinion (demonstrating your engagement with the short story). All the conclusion needs is three or four strong sentences which do not need to follow any set formula. Simply review the main points and go back to your introduction/the essay question have you answered it? It should be more than one sentence.

Conclusion In conclusion, Evan Hunter makes the reader feel sympathy for Andy through his skilful use of techniques, such as imagery and word choice. I felt sympathy for Andy at the end of the story because there were so many things that he wanted to do. Although the policeman saw Andy not as a person but just as another victim of gang conflict, Hunter helps us to see Andy as real person and one way he does this is by describing his hopes and dreams dreams we know

will never come true. Do Start with the words In conclusion or To conclude.. Refer back to the words of the question Sum up the main points of the essay and your feelings about the text. Identify the a part of the story that made you feel particularly sympathetic towards Andy.

End with a bang not a whimper Dont End with a detailed point or example Be negative about the text. Whether you enjoyed reading the text or not, your text was chosen because of its literary merit, you should appreciate this. Dont bring in any new points

STOP! Use this acronym to help you: S Summarise (what the essay has been about) T Task (refer back to the task) O Opinion (give your personal opinion) P Positive (make sure your opinion is positive)

Peer assess conclusions Swap and peer assess the conclusions you have written. Copy this table and tick the boxes if you can identify them in the introduction. S Summarise T Task O Opinion P Positive Write a comment underneath which says:

One thing they did well One thing they should work on to improve next time

Recently Viewed Presentations

  • Early South Asia & Early China - Weebly

    Early South Asia & Early China - Weebly

    Early South Asia & Early China Chapter 3 Notes Early South Asia 3rd civilization on the rise = Indus River Valley in South Asia Arose on the subcontinent of Asia = landmass that is part of a continent but is...
  • Tree Grading - ESF

    Tree Grading - ESF

    Tree Grading Why Tree Grading? Provide a consistent estimate of tree quality Provide a consistent estimate of stand value Provide a more realistic estimate of stumpage value based on grades and lumber prices Provide a linkage between the standing tree...
  • The Christian Creeds:

    The Christian Creeds:

    The Nicene Creed. The Nicene Creed was developed at the Councils of Nicaea (325 AD) and the Council of Constantinople (381 AD) It is a personal profession of the core beliefs held by Catholics. Reminds believers of the mysteries of...
  • Learning User Profiles from Traces

    Learning User Profiles from Traces

    Structured Hidden Markov Model: a General Framework for Modeling Complex sequences Ugo Galassi, Attilio Giordana e Lorenza Saitta Dipartimento di Informatica, Università del Piemonte Orientale,
  • Hands-On Ethical Hacking and Network Security

    Hands-On Ethical Hacking and Network Security

    Hands-On Ethical Hacking and Network Defense ... to a computer with shared folders or files * Additional Enumeration Tools NetScanTools Pro DumpSec Hyena NessusWX * NetScanTools Pro Produces a graphical view of NetBIOS running on a network Enumerates any shares...
  • Reconstruction: 1865-1877 - Loudoun County Public Schools

    Reconstruction: 1865-1877 - Loudoun County Public Schools

    The sharecropper rents a piece of land from the landowner. This rent includes a shack, seeds and farming tools. The sharecropper promises to give the landowner a percentage of the crops. The sharecropper plants and harvest the crops such as...
  • Artillery Large caliber guns used for warfare on

    Artillery Large caliber guns used for warfare on

    Vex (ing) Make (someone) feel annoyed, frustrated, or worried, esp. with trivial matter verb Annoy, irritate, infuriate Rabble A disorderly crowd, a mob Noun Commoners, populace, plebian disperse To go or cause to go in different directions or to different...
  • ICAOS Training 101-Transfer & Reporting Instructions Eligibility [Revision

    ICAOS Training 101-Transfer & Reporting Instructions Eligibility [Revision

    Rule 2.110. No State Shall permit an offender who is eligible for transfer under this compact to relocate to another state except as provided by these rules. The clear meaning of this rule is if an offender meets the eligibility...